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The Ideal gift this Christmas

Give your family the magical gift of

PETER PAN




Let yourself venture into Neverland this Christmas with this faithful adaptation of J.M. Barrie’s magical tale of Peter Pan as never before seen.

From the classic fairytale comes a movie that will truly capture the hearts

of children and adults alike.

Not since Richard Donner’s The Goonies has a film captured the audacious spirit of youth in one swashbuckling adventure. Hogan’s purely magical Pan enjoys an infinite supply of imagination in a truly magical and breathtaking dream world where anything is possible…as long as you believe!

Laugh, cry and remember the joys of your childhood as we follow Peter Pan, the boy who didn’t want to grow up and Wendy, the girl who is told she has to, on their adventures through Neverland fighting the likes of the evil captain Hook and his pirate crew.

Meet the magical inhabitants of Neverland:

Tinkerbell, the lost boys, the giant crocodile and many more charismatic characters.

Proceding the vague Disney's 50-year-old animated adaptation and Steven Spielberg’s Hook , we are given a fresh version of peter pan with which new generations of whimsy-challenged kids can be properly introduced to Barrie’s witty dialogs with the happy-go-lucky joys of Pan and his charismatic adventures.

This movie captures the essence of Peter Pan as never before, Cinematographer Donald McAlpine expands the rich colour palette he utilized in such vivid films as Moulin Rouge and Romeo +Juliet. And director P.J. Hogan slips in subplots of unrequited love, develops pangs of loneliness, and mixes fleeting flights of happiness with his heroism.

Director: P. J. Hogan (Confessions of a Shopaholic)

Studio: Universal Studios, Columbia Pictures and Revolution Studios.

Starring as

Captain Hook and George Darling: Jason Isaacs (Armageddon, Harry Potter)

Mrs. Darling: Olicia Williams (X-Men: The Last Stand)

Peter Pan: Jeremy Sumpter

Wendy Darling: Rachel Hurd-Wood

Tinker Bell: Ludivine Sagnier


Available on DVD and BlueRay now!





Comments (3)

Hello Donna,
I really liked reading your marketing writing style. You can clearly tell you are advertising the movie to parents and telling them that this would be the best Peter Pan adaptation for them and their children to watch. You use quite long sentences filled with great adjectives like "swashbuckling." You present a lot of information to the reader and to make it easier for them to read and digest, you could indent paragraphs or spaces between the lines. I like how at the beginning it draws the reader in but at the end I feel one more finishing/sum it up sentence to make sure the audience goes to see the film or buy it on DVD would make it perfect!

hey donna,
great marketing piece.this version of peter pan is a great film and you really captured it with your language and phrasing. i think you need to add to this piece, i found myself wanting to read more.

i agree with nancy, all of your information is in one big chunk. marketing pieces in general always break up the text to draw the readers eye and make it easier to read.

i do think you should have one short final line at the end, maybe a quote from the film/book or a critic/review quote.

sarah c

Thank you so much for your feedback, having read over again having your comments in mind, i must agree, I will keep them in mind and would love to hear what you think when i post the next draft!!!!
thank you :D

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